March Writing Challenge | Day 12

I was inspired by Brendan E Byrne’s comment on my first Friday Fictioneers post to write a haibun. A haibun is a poem made up of prose and haikus. I found this and this article interesting when learning what one was and how to write one. I really enjoyed it, maybe even more than writing haikus! Let me know what you think of my first attempt, although I’m aware it’s quite short.

Find full details of the challenge here.


Centuries ago,
when the Moon was but crater,
and spring was summer,
and autumn and winter.

Birds were given wings,
now so beautiful in flight,
a gift from the Sun.

The clouds turned green.

Let loose with envy,
a torrent of angry rain,
the greatest lakes born.

The world was still young,
in emotion it flowed fast.
Reckless. Carefree. Whole.

7 thoughts on “March Writing Challenge | Day 12

  1. Centuries ago,
    when the Moon was but crater,
    and spring was summer,
    and autumn and winter.

    Wow! Beautiful writing.

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  2. Well, never having written a haibun myself, I am in no position to comment on someone else’s work – but I really like this! Although I suspect the line “and autumn and winter” is supposed to be a single line on its own, like “the clouds turned green”. I loved the imagery of life-giving rains being the product of the clouds’ envy at the sub-bird’s luminous wings! 🙂

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  3. There are many haibun forms. I break the rules all the time. I put haiku in the beginning, middle and ends. Sometimes I put in solo tanka or solo renga. Or even other forms. Don’t let others rules bind your creativity. I generally have more verse or prose (paragraph/story) than short forms ex haiku, though. But don’t take just my slant. I like what you did. 😀

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